All The White Horses: Part One (1/5)

[dreiser]

I dunno why anyone who reads this would not know of my website but just to be a fucking nerd because that's totally what I am I'm posting here to let those of you who read this piddling Livejournal and enjoy my L Word fanfics know that I have part one out of five for my S3 angsty Danish fanfic All The White Horses finished. Here is the link:

http://www.dreiser.net/lwordfic/whitehorses.htm

I'm weirdly iffy when it comes to my writing abilities in regards to angsty fanfics like this, although for some strange reason I enjoy writing them, so feedback is appreciated more than usual. Not that I'm going to stomp my feet and pout and scream that I won't write parts two through five if you don't give me feedback because I'm a nerd, not a fucking baby, and I already have the damn fic plotted out. I just would sort of like to hear how I'm doing since I remain stupidly nervous as to the writing quality of the story.

And thus ends this post.

Comments

Fantastic Nick

[(Anonymous)]

Hi, I am Anonymous because I'm a blogger, not a live journal user. Anyway just dropped by to tell you. Your fanfic is fantastic! Definitely well worth the wait... but fucking angsty that it made my heart cry a little inside. :) Good writing! Keep it up! ~Kel

Re: Fantastic Nick

[dreiser.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm glad you're liking the fic so far. I was once a blogger. I have no idea why I'm no longer one. lol. Maybe laziness. That explains most of my actions.

[(Anonymous)]

loved it! don't worry about the angst. you've got it down and i did'nt think i'd say this but i kind of want helacious in the fic tho i'm a huge danisher. oh yeah... i could be wrong but your name is nic not nick, ya? like nicole? ;) ~Lace

[dreiser.livejournal.com]

Yeah, my name is Nicole and yeah again, I like to be called Nic. I'm glad you're rooting for Helacious. I love both of my ships equally and I find writing for both equally fun.

[narcolepsy-slds.livejournal.com]

I liked your story very much, though I didn't want to read it at first - I am not a big fan of angst. But I am glad I did.
Thanks for not making Lara the villain breaking up with Dana because of cancer, and for Hellacious friendship.

Maybe the nerd in me has to ask about it, but if she has stage III breast cancer, is the chemotherapy you are talking about neoadjuvant - before the surgery - because you didn't mention surgery?

[dreiser.livejournal.com]

Yeah, it's neoadjuvant treatment. I didn't go too much into it just because I'm focusing more on the emotional impact of the cancer treatment rather than the scientific steps. My bad! Should I alter it and be more specific? In chapter two I'm going to have Dana going in for the actual surgery.

There's no way I could make Lara into a villain. She's a peep! lol. Seriously though. Lara isn't a bad person and no one is the villain in this. It's life, you know? People have problems, they break up, they make up. I'm going to have Lara show up throughout the fic, not as much as Helena, because Helena is Alice's best friend. And dude, I totally love writing Helacious friendship. I just hope the actual show features it, you know?

[narcolepsy-slds.livejournal.com]

I was just interested in the medical side because it is my background and some people I know had breast cancer, I don't think it is important for the overall story.

It's great that you are writing this story because I am almost convinced that the story line in the show will be horrible. I don't like where IC is taking Alice in the preview (though LH was sooooo good in it, it was painful to watch), and I think she might "use" Dana's cancer to reconcile Danish. I am just not optimistic considering the jumps and loops of last season.

(frozen)

[dreiser.livejournal.com]

Let me know if anything seems inconsistent to you when it comes the medical side. I do have someone helping me but I like feedback on any level, you know? Especially about something serious like this. Sadly, it shows what I'm like as a person because thus far every woman in my family, father and mother's side, have died of some form of cancer. Breast, uteran, lung and do I know anything about the treatment? Nope. I blocked it out. But I sort of learned that from like... zoning out on my heart doctors. lol. It's really sad. I should pay attention but I don't.

Anyway! I don't have much faith in IC's storytelling for the upcoming season regarding Danish either. I also think that she's going to use Dana's illness to reconcile them as a couple and while I don't want Dana to die I have this sinking feeling she is. And if she does die, I want them to at least to be a couple when it happens. Simply because it would lend to some wonderful Alice character development in S4. I mean, if Dana dies there will be character development for Alice no matter what because of their relationship but it will be especially significant if they're back together.

Blerh. The only thing in S3 I'm looking forward to is Helacious friendship and Jenny's storyline with Max/Moira. Just because I love Jenny and Max/Moira promo cracked me up. Such twisted humor.

[narcolepsy-slds.livejournal.com]

I have worked both on a leukaemia and breast cancer department, so if you have any questions etc. just ask away.
My family also seems to have some sort of cancer gene - but most of my relatives had colon cancer - my 30th birthday will also bring on my first colonoscopy - I am thankful for the development of virtual colonoscopy, not only because I think it is a cool technology.

If Dana should die, it would make sense to get Danish back together. I am speculating here, but then it could be those two marrying in the last episode right before Dana dies - okay, this is really BH 90210. IC could have some heart wrenching drama and romance, and as you said we could have an amazing storyline for Alice in S4. And possible Helacious as well.

Jenny is one of my fave characters as well, and her development and stories have been the most interesting so far. Sometimes she was a bit too far off even for me, but Mia Kirshners performance has always been exceptional. So I am looking forward to her story as well.